21st February, 2008

My Big Jump

One bursting hot summer day, my dad set up Mikey’s (my brother) and my enormous water slide. I could smell the water as it sprinkled a sparkly clear liquid. I put my bathing suit on and ran as fast as a lion to get over there.

When I got there, Mikey was was already there having a grand old time. I climbed up the ladder to the slide and slid down. Then Mikey jumped up and landed SMACK! on his bottom then slid down. It looked like he had a lot of fun and why I copied him I don’t know but I was in second grade so cut me some slack. Up! Up! And Away! as I jumped into the air.

SPLAT! YEOW! It felt like I broke all the bones in my body. “Mikey, get mom,” I groaned. As you can see I was in a lot of pain.It felt like the pain was flying up then it would slide back down.

I thought I was in hot water as I saw my mom running as fast as her big belly (she was pregnant) would let her. She called everyone we knew (and I mean everyone) and she also called 9-1-1. the EMS workers rushed over here. I felt kind of silly because they wrapped me in a million towels and put me on a board, plus they were tickling my toes and asking me if I felt it. After a few more questions they put me in the emergency trucks and raced me to the hospital.

When we got there I forgot the doctors name but here we go with the questions again. “Can you feel this? Can you feel that?” Then they took some x-rays. I had to wear a heavy suit. A couple hours later the doctor said it was okay to go home.

That’s all I remember now but every time my dad sets up the slide I make sure I’m extra careful when I slide down.

Posted at 11:21 am |


7 Comments

  1. On February 23, 2008 at 5:15 am shulburt said:

    February 23, 2008 at 5:15 am

    I LOVE this story! You wrote this at the beginning of the year though-so I am wondering with all that you have learned about writing this year, what would you change if you had the chance to revise it?

  2. On February 27, 2008 at 12:04 pm sarah said:

    February 27, 2008 at 12:04 pm

    Belle I loved the part when you put splat! yeow! But were did you fall on the slide or beside it?And was it one of those biow up slides or a hard slide?

  3. On February 27, 2008 at 12:11 pm isaac said:

    February 27, 2008 at 12:11 pm

    “hey i liked how you explained that your mom is [pregnant] and [i mean everyone.]‘you were really focused on one thing which was your big jump.’you should improve explaining more details.i like your onomatopoeia.

  4. On February 27, 2008 at 12:18 pm Belle said:

    February 27, 2008 at 12:18 pm

    Sarah, It was a water slide but I jumped so high when i landed at the bottom of the slide I knocked the air out of me.

  5. On February 27, 2008 at 2:35 pm cassieh said:

    February 27, 2008 at 2:35 pm

    Belle I loved your writing. Because you put your personality into it.

  6. On April 18, 2008 at 2:26 pm christians said:

    April 18, 2008 at 2:26 pm

    I love your voice in your piece. This piece rules

  7. On May 5, 2008 at 10:19 pm Happenings » Blog Archive » Blogging in the Future? said:

    May 5, 2008 at 10:19 pm

    [...] you have completed during Writer’s Workshop.  For example, Belle wrote her story “My Big Jump” at the beginning of the year.  After you post a blog, your classmates, friends, teachers, [...]

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