First day at ”EDGEMERE ROADRUNNERS”
February 27th 2008 by jesser in UncategorizedFirst day at ”EDGEMERE” ”ROADRUNNERS” I got so scared because I was in a knew class GUESS WHAT I thought no one was going to be my friend.Till someone picked me as there knew best friend.And then all of us were doing are work someone was scaring me …and then THURUNTHUNTHUNTHUNTHUNTHOINGTHOINGTHOINGTHOING!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I got time to read a book I had finished the whole thing I was so happy.Till we had gone to the COMPUTER LAB.I didn’t recognise somebody familiar. TO BE CONTINUED…!
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Who was your new best friend?
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Frankie I …..I …..You were my best friend!
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SO WHAT HOW CARES WHY IS IT INPORTENT
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Josh, as I read your comment to Jesse, I feel that most other people who read this will misunderstand your questions. Remember that a significant comment to a blog should begin with something positive-maybe what you liked, a personal connection, what this makes you think of, etc. However, you haven’t taken the time to tell Jesse what you LIKED about his piece before offering constructive criticism. What exactly do you mean by “so what?” “who cares” and “why is it important”? Are you saying the Jesse that as a reader you had difficulty understanding why this story was written?
A better way to word this would be…
As a reader, I found that I had difficulty understanding how the story affected you. Remember that as a writer, you should try to include a part in your story that explains “So what, why do these events matter to you? Why are these events important to Jesse?”. If you take the time to explain these ideas to your readers they will be better able to relive the experience through your story.
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