Comments for Happenings

Comment on Let Sleeping Dogs Lie by idalysd

idalysd — Fri, 14 Nov 2008 16:33:08 +0000

I like your story because of how you talk about timber and how you tell us what it sounded like when he talk to Mr. hulburt in do you mind Im trying to sleep here voice.

Comment on Let Sleeping Dogs Lie by alysandrac

alysandrac — Tue, 11 Nov 2008 14:50:17 +0000

I like how you that you said that Timber said ”do you mind I’m trying to sleep here.” And how Timber glare into your husband’s eyes. You need more flashy vocab.

Comment on Post of the Week 9/22/08: Stay Out of the Creek! by saraim

saraim — Tue, 11 Nov 2008 03:08:21 +0000

I also saw you mispelled “the”.And I also liked when you said “CHRISTOPHER” because I could see it in my head.

Comment on Flying Fish by tomasm

tomasm — Thu, 06 Nov 2008 15:55:06 +0000

I liked how you used onomatopeoeia and personifacation but you need a little description and flashy vocab.

Comment on Flying Fish by jadenh

jadenh — Thu, 06 Nov 2008 15:54:21 +0000

Mrs.Hulburt I like how you used lots of ontomatopea.I think you could add some more flashy vocab

Comment on Control by josea

josea — Thu, 06 Nov 2008 15:52:32 +0000

I been there to but not in the same way but i don`t understand how it is out out of reach. and it happens a lot but sometimes it`s not from stress

Comment on Flying Fish by andrewl

andrewl — Thu, 06 Nov 2008 15:49:24 +0000

I thought that story was nice and yet, very sad! Where were Carrie and Christopher? Other than that, the story was awsome!

Comment on Life of Luxury by peterm

peterm — Thu, 06 Nov 2008 15:38:32 +0000

I like when you where tolking about the ocaen that made me raed it like i never cood stop.
i just liked your story.

Comment on Flying Fish by eddier

eddier — Thu, 06 Nov 2008 15:34:25 +0000

I like how you used personification. I hate to see killed fish just like you Mrs.Hulburt. It is sad to see baby fish killed right Mrs. Hulburt?

Comment on Flying Fish by justinm

justinm — Thu, 06 Nov 2008 15:34:06 +0000

Mrs. Hulburt I like how you had onomatopoeia where the fish smack the tree and I like when the bird flow down and swallow the little fish. You need to put some flashy vocab.